Audience Feedback - Second Draft Music Promo

Teacher's Feedback:

• I like the improvements and the narrative is a bit clearer now
• I like the sound before it starts - could you include the noise of typing on the phone? You would need to make it subtle
• Lip syncing needs a bit of work

To improve-

• The ending is a little abrupt. You could go back to your RMAs and see how they finish
• I think that you could make the confirmation email clearer towards the end. 

Focus Group Feedback:


Amy

• I like the shots with the more lip syncing
• I really like the pan shot of her playing the guitar, and the pan shot of her writing lyrics
• I love the shots of her performing the song - the lip syncing and the matching to the song

To improve-

• Between the performance and the final part of the music video, you could have strobe flashing images to cut in time with the drums to transition - either with one of the shots or both

Rhiannon

• I really love it- I think the narrative is clear and if I hadn't have known the story I would have understood it 
• I love the lip syncing section with the colourful lighting - it appeared very indie and alternative, and added a nice performance element to the video, and looks very visually pleasing

To improve-

• I think there may be a few too many shots of closing the laptop and putting it away, because it becomes slightly repetitive
• There are certain sections where the lip syncing is perhaps slightly out of time with the music
• Maybe have less shots of her taking off coats and putting jumpers on 

Ben

• The music was not totally in sync with the lips 
• I think its good overall 
• I like that you know her goal

To improve-

•  Improve the lip syncing part so they are synced 

Joe

• I like the new shots of the guitar and lip syncing
• The changes in shots flowed well, they weren't all over the place

To improve-

•  In the email at the end, she spelled 'opportunity' wrong

From this feedback, we now need to:

• Fix the ending so that it flows better and finishes less abruptly
• Go back to the lip syncing parts and make sure they match the timing of the lyrics
• Take out some of the shots of her putting on and taking off her coat and replace with more shots of her playing guitar and writing lyrics
• Include ambient sound of typing at the beginning of the video