Audience Feedback - First Draft Music Promo

Teacher's Feedback

• Add slow motion
• Have different transitions between different locations
• Some of the shots are too long
• The wardrobe shot is too long & too dark
• Try different speeds and lengths
• Storyline is clear & makes sense
• Some shots are too static
• Shot sizes need to change
• Change order of shots, from long to close
• In time with song - lip syncing, song writing & guitar playing

• I like the swaying of the camera in the performance part
• The camera shots and lighting are good in this part
• The shots of her singing are really good - lip syncing is good
• It's got really good elements to it
• I like the concept
• The way the video is structured is very linear

To improve:

• Include audio in beginning shots before music starts
• Have a close up shot of rejection email to make it clear - I can't read them
• Nice locations, but it's too flat so intersperse them
• Film shots of emails in better lighting and make the shots stable
• Have tighter close up shots of her in her room & fragmented shots to keep it interesting

Focus Group Feedback

Amy

• The lip syncing in the performance part is really good
• I like the mirror shots - they're well framed
• I like the dog shots

To improve:

• I think the last shot of the performance part may have been out of sync
• The shot when she leaves the bedroom is a bit confusing as it looks like she's saying bye to someone

Rhiannon

• I love the lip syncing shots with the lighting
• The ending shots are very good
• I don't think the narrative is 100% clear as there is a few unnecessary shots of her eating which confuses the narrative a bit

To improve:

• The beginning of the video needs some diegetic sound as it is silent, and then the music starts really abruptly

Ben

• I like how it finishes with the start of the song
• At the end I wasn't sure if she was actually performing or if it was a dream
• I like it

To improve: 

• Have more meaningful shots during the long black pauses 

Joe

• The best part was the dog interaction as it was cute but genuine
• In the lip syncing part I really like the lighting - it draws attention to her - very edgy

To improve:

• When she turns around after leaving the bedroom, it does look like she's saying bye to someone, it's a bit confusing 

From this feedback, we now need to:

• Plan more shots of her playing the guitar
• More shots showing the process of her writing the song - throwing paper of lyrics into bin?
• Refilm shots of emails to make them clearer to read
• Include audio of beginning shots
• Film more close up shots of her in her room